Thread:Migster7/@comment-24.107.211.63-20120816230720

http://ben10fanfiction.wikia.com/wiki/Charming_to_See_You

I've altered one of your episodes, the one on the page above, and I'd like to ask you to keep it altered, please. This is constructive criticism, your story description has three big problems that I want fixed:

1. Charmcaster is canonly as powerful as a GOD in Ledgerdomain. One of the show writers flat-out said so. She cannot be defeated there, and certainly not by falling off a castle balcony. She can FLY. She did so in "Couples Retreat".

2. Your story has Charmcaster and Hex's characters COMPLETELY SWAPPED. Charmcaster is the "frenemy", the one who would do a good deed and let the heoes go, she's not evil at heart, she just sought power to revive the father she loved. Hex is the one who just wants power and is just plain evil. Your story has Hex in the "frenemy" role and Charmcaster as a cackling, power-hungry villain. That is just NOT RIGHT.

3. Dude, tone down the physical violence. All the talk of punching and kicking Charmcaster is really disturbing; she's a girl, remember? It makes your character seem like an abusive type. Yes, she needs to be fought, but aliens have POWERS. Use them, don't rely on fisticuffs.

That is all. Please keep the changes maintained. Fanfic may be fanfic, but canon and characterization, such as Charmcaster's, ought to be respected or else it makes no sense. 